Comic/graphic novel (Whichever you think)

[Jendraz]

Nice, I really like the theme you have going on, it's very creepy. The first image doesn't make sense to me in terms of order. I read the big panel on the right last, but I feel like it is 2nd to last? They see the body from the cliff and then go down to the road?

[hamish_123]

Yeah...I had real trouble getting the order to make sense. The first picture is them looking over the cliff onto the city, Second is the one directly right from it and the third is the large picture with the body at the bottom. Followed by the feet on the left side then the wide shot of the cliff and the n finally the picture of the dead woman on the ground. Sorry about that..It will be fixed in the complete version. Confusing

Anyway I just put the rest of Part 1 together.

Part 1 continued.

Page 4

Page 5 (the gun actualy belongs to a cop-a dead cop-but that picture got lost...so dont be confused )

Page 6

[Jendraz]

It's looking sweet, man. I would consider changing "buddy" to something else. At least once he dies, I think it's a little more sad if he calls him by a name..buddy makes me think of a dog.

[hamish_123]

Yes..good point. Perhaps If i called him Buster it would help

Also I've failed to mention the content of this 'comic' is mostly all from dreams and nighmares I've had in the last year or two.

[Renegade_Turner]

It's looking sweet, man. I would consider changing "buddy" to something else. At least once he dies, I think it's a little more sad if he calls him by a name..buddy makes me think of a dog.

Actually, I like how he called him buddy. In an ironic sense. It's kind of dark black humour. Evil Dead style. I say keep it.

[Glabbit]

You've done it now, and it's up and out. no sense in changing it.
This is what is it, and what it is is neat.

MaikMoar™

[hamish_123]

Part two is giving me the shits at the moment. Its about 75% complete at the moment and I havent done it in order so I cant even show you the first few pages. Ill be able to show you the first page today or tomorrow.

[nutcracker]

Pretty cool, you deserve a spot in the hall of fame

[hamish_123]

Woah...thats a incredible statement. I dont really contribute at all I dont think...

[Glabbit]

Ptah! More than me, you do. You contribute amazingness. And you're generally accepted to be aa good person, which is a 10++ in my book.

[hamish_123]

Given the very sow progress of Part two and three I thought it neccisary to post at least a small bit of Part two, just because it would be a nice thing to do. So here you go.

Part Two: In which a new enemy is revealed and I arrive at my school but a wonderful reunion is short lived.

Page 1 (The Grey Lady you see here is from a recurring dream i had for about a month...just thought youd like to know)

[Lotus Wolf]

epic... keep going this is the shit!

[hamish_123]

Seeing as its nearlly christmas I don't think I'll be getting much done at all, especially since a person I'd organized to help with something has not done so, but merry christmas anyway and I hope you all have a good time.

[Jendraz]

one comment - in the top right pannel the unshaded portions look weird next to the shaded portions. Maybe you can add a little depth to the rest?

[hamish_123]

Hey, sadly my holidays distracted me from working on the comic. They are however coming to an end and so I have begun work again and part two is quite close to completion. Anyways I had better get back to it.

Part 2 ETA - two or so days.