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Poetry, anyone?

Posted: Sat Nov 19, 2005 2:02 am
by Albab
the cold

Just as I hit the bottom, you lifted me
you helped me through the night
as I was overwhelmed with nothing,
you threw me inside, and took off my coat.
You made me feel as if I felt
As if I actually had something to hold
thank you, for bringing me in from the cold.

Mm. Guess what happened to me? Anyway, comments, feedback, poetry of your own, and such-such.

Re: Poetry, anyone?

Posted: Sat Jan 12, 2013 7:40 pm
by MadCatMax
Did not enjoy, the poem is way to cliché and it is a overdone concept

but i did like this one line:

you helped me through the night
as I was overwhelmed with nothing,