Metal Flesh (a Story by Colicedus)
Posted: Mon May 14, 2007 6:51 am
I have been working a little on an introduction to a Story, It way fair better as Computer game, I don't know, But tell me what you think, Honesty is Promoted here, if its a pace of crap to you I wanna know why?
In a Slumber for what seemed eternity, He was now waking up...
His memories of the past had been forgotten... Who he was Is now a phantom.
Numbed from the Loss of his limbs from years of War, He is more machine than man.
Half His face Taken by the madness of Finding a way to upgrade his mortal flesh.
only one eye remains true, the other, covered in a Dash board of tools that Help him forge his victories.
Metal Flesh
The Awakening
His old eye made a movement. Shut and still since ages of lost times. They opened our hero to world full of gel.
A long tube connected to his face giving him breath. He could feel the cool sensation all over what was left of his body.
he brought around one arm, his fore arm was covered in deep scars and a few craters. He checked his other arm, There was no comply with the muscles there.
He Turned his head to look. The Stub of an arm around his biceps remained. The rest was sealed off with his flesh...
from his Trapezium muscles were a set of wires coated in rubber. they were a millimeter thick.
By pure instinct he tugged on one to remove it. however, as he tugged it, the fluid drained out from his little chamber.
The only thing that held him up was his these wires...
His instincts were to kick around and find something to stand on till he realized he had nothing to kick with.
He looked up and saw a small computer screen above him, It was never there before, or was it?
Our Hero could not remember. Now that he thought on it, He could not remember anything...
he could not even Identify himself...
Our hero was Quickly Interrupted from his train of thought as the Computer Screen printed a few words...
Although he had forgotten so much, the words were legible to him.
on the screen was printed "I hope you had a nice sleep agent... "
From the sides of the Tube there was a trap door made of metal, they grinned open.
The screen once more was a beep and the sound of printing.
"your Memories are about to be reinstalled, this should only take a minute..." it said in bold letters.
half way though reading, a sharp pain filled our heros face.
A long needle injected itself into his face. the pain soon went after a few seconds.
it pulled itself out. He could feel the removal of it from the flesh around it being moved, but the rest of the feeling ended there.
He looked at the needle and then back at the screen, which had moved a clamp to his face.
The clamp fitted itself on the numb side of his face.
as it rested there for a few seconds, he felt his other eye open up.
Digits and data filled his vision and then ceased to be seen.
A few Things came back to him, but not much.
He could remember more about using his Interface, and how to operate most machines.
One thing he knew was there were a few bits and pieces that were to be installed to him, things such as his mechanical Limbs.
that was when his body was pulled into an akimbo stance and he felt a set of clamps being put on his biceps.
He felt the needles from it penetrate the nerve endings. it was a painful all deal, but he could not move, an voice in his head told him "Stay still, this will only last a few seconds" wether pulling away would help or not is another question. Soon the metal Clamps gave off a mild blue light and the pain was no more. his restricted movement ceased.
He heard the voice once again, it said "These are your new nerve endings... <BLIP> They are now apart of your body... <BURLAP>"
with the pause in machinery moving he touched the metal plates on it... they gave feeling, but it was not the same as the touch of skin. It was a cold steel to the touch and could not feel warmth, they were like a refection of his numbness he felt inside himself.
A pair of mechanical arms came from the ground from a hatch and handed him a Robotic arm like a Knight Presented his new blade. It contained three fine fingers and a thumb, the index finger had a small Swiss army tool set. There was a few tendons that moved the arms fingers, down that the bottom there was a place that looked like the Metal clamps that "are a part of his body" could fit into.
With out even being told by the voice he put the arm on.
It sprung into life and he could mobilize it. It was like second nature to use it, ingrained in his subconches.
He was then interrupted by his body being forced strait, his back and all were clicked into place.
in between each vertebra was a sharp needle, like the arm it fixed its way into his nerves system.
A moment of pain passed, but once it had set, he felt like he was touching the floor. He had legs!
He had everything to move around with! Arms, legs and a Back.
Once again he looked up at the screen.
It Printed "Borging complete... Please, have a Nice day"
The Glass Chamber started to lift around the front but shattered.
It was a change in atmosphere that was like a mothers womb.
Pure darkness filled the room.
Only a few blue lights kept the light from more Chambers like his owen gave any light.
Doing the only thing left to do, he decided to explore.
Taking a step onto the broken glass, he could feel his feet. They were like Steel hooves.
They Crushed the broken glass and sloshed around the remaining fluid from his tank.
Only his eye that just opened could see the world around him, the other was as good as blind, but his new eye was more like a heat seeking vision than anything.
It looked like the room was about ten foot by six.
There were a set of other incubator like tubes.
There content was a very yellow to orange tone, while the middle was a blue to purple color.
He took a few minutes to get an understanding of his surroundings.
The room was made of metal boarding, and next to impenetrable.
There were Wires in between the cracks of the walls.
He thought to himself "maybe, if I know what's behind the wires, I can find a way out of this dark pit"
Doing the only thing he could do he shifted the wires around, behind them? only more steel.
There had to be a way out though...
He thought hard and clear "If i do get out what will I find? What if something tries to get the better of me? ...Will I find answers? hmm, better anywhere than here..."
He was Interupted by a beeping. in his new eye came up a dashboard, it had printed: INTERCEPTED TRANSMISSION, do you want to open TRANSMISSION T025-1121681-9-30-3-9-59?
Some how He knew exactly what this was, like walking, It was ingrained into him some how.
He decided to open it.
"<crackle-fuzz-fuzz> "Hey, Have you found the kids yet? I'v been looking for them in these blasted cave for the last five hours, and you know what?" <crackle> "What NOW?" <bizzt> "I still aint found... <Buzzz> She-i-ite! ok, they could have just ended up falling down this freaking underground Aquiduct I just found!" <crackle> "Nice Try... don't you dare crawl you fat ass up here with them... and Darren.... if those kids come to any harm, Im gonna open a can of <bizzt-fuzz-fuzz-fuz-bizzt> on you, you hear me, I will..." <TRANSMISSION, ENDED>"
was it a little too cliché?
In a Slumber for what seemed eternity, He was now waking up...
His memories of the past had been forgotten... Who he was Is now a phantom.
Numbed from the Loss of his limbs from years of War, He is more machine than man.
Half His face Taken by the madness of Finding a way to upgrade his mortal flesh.
only one eye remains true, the other, covered in a Dash board of tools that Help him forge his victories.
Metal Flesh
The Awakening
His old eye made a movement. Shut and still since ages of lost times. They opened our hero to world full of gel.
A long tube connected to his face giving him breath. He could feel the cool sensation all over what was left of his body.
he brought around one arm, his fore arm was covered in deep scars and a few craters. He checked his other arm, There was no comply with the muscles there.
He Turned his head to look. The Stub of an arm around his biceps remained. The rest was sealed off with his flesh...
from his Trapezium muscles were a set of wires coated in rubber. they were a millimeter thick.
By pure instinct he tugged on one to remove it. however, as he tugged it, the fluid drained out from his little chamber.
The only thing that held him up was his these wires...
His instincts were to kick around and find something to stand on till he realized he had nothing to kick with.
He looked up and saw a small computer screen above him, It was never there before, or was it?
Our Hero could not remember. Now that he thought on it, He could not remember anything...
he could not even Identify himself...
Our hero was Quickly Interrupted from his train of thought as the Computer Screen printed a few words...
Although he had forgotten so much, the words were legible to him.
on the screen was printed "I hope you had a nice sleep agent... "
From the sides of the Tube there was a trap door made of metal, they grinned open.
The screen once more was a beep and the sound of printing.
"your Memories are about to be reinstalled, this should only take a minute..." it said in bold letters.
half way though reading, a sharp pain filled our heros face.
A long needle injected itself into his face. the pain soon went after a few seconds.
it pulled itself out. He could feel the removal of it from the flesh around it being moved, but the rest of the feeling ended there.
He looked at the needle and then back at the screen, which had moved a clamp to his face.
The clamp fitted itself on the numb side of his face.
as it rested there for a few seconds, he felt his other eye open up.
Digits and data filled his vision and then ceased to be seen.
A few Things came back to him, but not much.
He could remember more about using his Interface, and how to operate most machines.
One thing he knew was there were a few bits and pieces that were to be installed to him, things such as his mechanical Limbs.
that was when his body was pulled into an akimbo stance and he felt a set of clamps being put on his biceps.
He felt the needles from it penetrate the nerve endings. it was a painful all deal, but he could not move, an voice in his head told him "Stay still, this will only last a few seconds" wether pulling away would help or not is another question. Soon the metal Clamps gave off a mild blue light and the pain was no more. his restricted movement ceased.
He heard the voice once again, it said "These are your new nerve endings... <BLIP> They are now apart of your body... <BURLAP>"
with the pause in machinery moving he touched the metal plates on it... they gave feeling, but it was not the same as the touch of skin. It was a cold steel to the touch and could not feel warmth, they were like a refection of his numbness he felt inside himself.
A pair of mechanical arms came from the ground from a hatch and handed him a Robotic arm like a Knight Presented his new blade. It contained three fine fingers and a thumb, the index finger had a small Swiss army tool set. There was a few tendons that moved the arms fingers, down that the bottom there was a place that looked like the Metal clamps that "are a part of his body" could fit into.
With out even being told by the voice he put the arm on.
It sprung into life and he could mobilize it. It was like second nature to use it, ingrained in his subconches.
He was then interrupted by his body being forced strait, his back and all were clicked into place.
in between each vertebra was a sharp needle, like the arm it fixed its way into his nerves system.
A moment of pain passed, but once it had set, he felt like he was touching the floor. He had legs!
He had everything to move around with! Arms, legs and a Back.
Once again he looked up at the screen.
It Printed "Borging complete... Please, have a Nice day"
The Glass Chamber started to lift around the front but shattered.
It was a change in atmosphere that was like a mothers womb.
Pure darkness filled the room.
Only a few blue lights kept the light from more Chambers like his owen gave any light.
Doing the only thing left to do, he decided to explore.
Taking a step onto the broken glass, he could feel his feet. They were like Steel hooves.
They Crushed the broken glass and sloshed around the remaining fluid from his tank.
Only his eye that just opened could see the world around him, the other was as good as blind, but his new eye was more like a heat seeking vision than anything.
It looked like the room was about ten foot by six.
There were a set of other incubator like tubes.
There content was a very yellow to orange tone, while the middle was a blue to purple color.
He took a few minutes to get an understanding of his surroundings.
The room was made of metal boarding, and next to impenetrable.
There were Wires in between the cracks of the walls.
He thought to himself "maybe, if I know what's behind the wires, I can find a way out of this dark pit"
Doing the only thing he could do he shifted the wires around, behind them? only more steel.
There had to be a way out though...
He thought hard and clear "If i do get out what will I find? What if something tries to get the better of me? ...Will I find answers? hmm, better anywhere than here..."
He was Interupted by a beeping. in his new eye came up a dashboard, it had printed: INTERCEPTED TRANSMISSION, do you want to open TRANSMISSION T025-1121681-9-30-3-9-59?
Some how He knew exactly what this was, like walking, It was ingrained into him some how.
He decided to open it.
"<crackle-fuzz-fuzz> "Hey, Have you found the kids yet? I'v been looking for them in these blasted cave for the last five hours, and you know what?" <crackle> "What NOW?" <bizzt> "I still aint found... <Buzzz> She-i-ite! ok, they could have just ended up falling down this freaking underground Aquiduct I just found!" <crackle> "Nice Try... don't you dare crawl you fat ass up here with them... and Darren.... if those kids come to any harm, Im gonna open a can of <bizzt-fuzz-fuzz-fuz-bizzt> on you, you hear me, I will..." <TRANSMISSION, ENDED>"
was it a little too cliché?