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Thanks for your comment,everyone , i think almost everyone have flaws in languages and other sorts of things , like cooking. And i will improve my grammar too.



part 6(i think):The second Turner.

Suddenly, Turner fainted on the ground of the arena , the vilagers carried him into the medical clinic , the doctor said , " He fainted because he overexerted his strengh ! I ' ill say he has tremendous strengh ! "After two days , and two nights , Turner woke up on the dawn of the third day , he woke his family and his girlfriend , his mother said , "Turner , do you remember what had happened after you entered the arena ? " Turner said , " i only remember that something red flew into me and i was overcome by anger ! After that , i remember nothing . " He did not understand why his family look worried after he said that . His girlfriend said , " After you have beaten your opponent , you fainted and your opponent died from a kick when you ' re running and lifted your feet . Turner could not believe what she said !


Bye bye , i need to go tuition now.

Hmm, I think I might rephrase this story when and if you're done.

It could end up pretty good with better grammar.

BunnyWithStick wrote:Hmm, I think I might rephrase this story when and if you're done.

It could end up pretty good with better grammar.

you are welcome !

it was good enough to make a BIG sieries

Part 7: The seven paws

10 years later, Turner was already a full grown rabbit with the full power of the scrolls, he set off to find the master of martial arts in the suburbs of the already advanced rabbit city. Before dusk, Turner settled down in the middle of the rainforest, once a casino of the humans was now overgrown with weeds, climbers, and all sorts of rainforest plants. And it was the last artifact of the once an advanced race. Turner sat on a log facing the fire he had made and started to stare into the fire, thinking of his family, his friends, and the villagers. Before he put the fire out, he heard a rustle between the bushes, thinking it was a snake, he grabbed it with his hand, but he didn't expect it to strike hin with its tail, but, that wasn't a tail, it was a furry paw, with claws he shoved it near the fire and found that it was a fully grown grizzly! Turner did a back flip and was 3 metres away from it. The Grizzly charged towards him and tried to grab him but he was to fast for him, in the end Turner kicked it in the head with a roundhouse, sending it flying towards the fire, burning to death.
That was the luckiest day of Turner' s life, for he could eat high premium bear's paws !


I am back and i think it has been a few days since i disappeared from this forum, cracking my mind for the next part.

Part 8: Judo Turner

Who would have expected someone in the dark observing his every move.
His every kill, his every motion. Out of nowhere, a rabbit jumped out from the bushes. Turner was surprised! He couldn't see clearly but thinks it is just a rabbit.At that point, he picked up the rabbit. And tried to throw it into the fire. Who knows a glimmering light emits from within the rabbit, blinding Turner. Turner watches in awe as within the rabbit came out a scroll. Turner read the scroll: " What you see, May never be what you thought it to be..." Then, the rabbit shone even brighter. The rabbt seems to be going through metamorphorsis finally. Turner recognises from the serene way the rabbit looks. The hunched back that has developed because of years of training. It is none other than the Martial Arts Master! Judo Turner ( What is expected of Turner to change into).

do you have a hunched back?