Short Film

hamish_123 · Post by **hamish_123** » Fri Nov 21, 2008 8:19 pm

Have a watch adn tell me what you think. I made it in a day (which is probably very obvious). So tell me if you think its crap, good, great, pretend you watched it, laugh at me mercilessly - your choice, just tell me what you think.

http://au.youtube.com/watch?v=5L8Kkbe6ddU

Count Roland · Post by **Count Roland** » Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:55 pm

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH HE TURNDEDED INTU A TRE IT FUN KNEE IN WAI I NO WACH!? idk what I just said if it makes sense please explain it to me.

hamish_123 · Post by **hamish_123** » Fri Nov 21, 2008 10:18 pm

I can make no sense of your statement....but thanks.

Dudeman · Post by **Dudeman** » Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:10 pm

Pretty funny, nice job Hamish, it shows talent as a director, did you write the script?

Count Roland · Post by **Count Roland** » Sat Nov 22, 2008 5:38 am

oh did I spell something rong again lol.

hamish_123 · Post by **hamish_123** » Sat Nov 22, 2008 8:20 am

Thanks! Yeah i wrote the script etc. I had to shoot it with a crappy digital camera as im saving for a proper camera as of now. So hopefully soon ill be making better quality (in terms of visual anyway) movies.

And Count Roland, don't worry about it, we all have a few spelling mistakes here and there, you just happened to have your lifetimes worth in one sentence

Chainsaw man · Post by **Chainsaw man** » Sat Nov 22, 2008 11:28 am

id gladly watch it, but I wont.
reason given: My grans computer has slow speed internet.

Count Roland · Post by **Count Roland** » Sat Nov 22, 2008 2:39 pm

good, I was trying to get my life's sentence out in one or two posts but yeah it's pretty funny.

Jendraz · Post by **Jendraz** » Mon Nov 24, 2008 8:12 pm

This is pretty cool, I really like some of the sequences you do (like 2:03 - 2:14). they're nice and artistic

So here comes the criticism. I'm a film major, so I love to do this..

The ambient sound is inconsistent at times (mainly wind and diegetic music). this would be ok except that I think you are trying to maintain consistency with the image

The frames of black between 1:25-1:38 seemed kind of pointless to me. I don't know if you had an intention for them or not.
actually it seems you often use black to separate sequences that occur in different times. I don't like it personally, I would either just cut or use a dissolve (although that's more cheesy and doesn't fit in with your style). I like the idea of just cutting, since you've already got a lot of it.

I would fade the end or do something so that it doesn't just cut out.

Nice job

Make another.

hamish_123 · Post by **hamish_123** » Tue Nov 25, 2008 7:05 am

Thankyou

Very fair and true criticisms which i can hopefully resolve soon. I have made another short film very similiar to it found here: http://au.youtube.com/watch?v=OW8jRBC0MGw

But I'm afraid the focus is not to good (focuses and unfocuses alot) and the sound inconsistencies are again a problem, but all in all I'm quite proud of it.

Jendraz · Post by **Jendraz** » Tue Nov 25, 2008 7:16 pm

hamish_123 wrote: But I'm afraid the focus is not to good (focuses and unfocuses alot) and the sound inconsistencies are again a problem, but all in all I'm quite proud of it.

Yea man, you should be. Film is awesome

edit: The point of view shot of the clock is sweet. Those kind of techniques make it interesting.

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